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Wednesday, 21 October 2015

Minecraft

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On tuesday It was a very hot day.the whole entire school had a symposium. Our class done minecraft. And then we rearranged the tables. Suddenly the bell rang 3 times. The whole school had their to.

First we picked some people for the guards and then It was eleven o'clock all the others went with miss nicola well the guards stay and the people that do the minecraft preparation then A class came and had a look at us playing minecraft. Then We had the best day.

8 comments:

  1. that's cool as jaydyn the house look cool and your writing

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  2. Great start. Very clear. Does the reader want to know about playtime and lunch though? Perhaps this is not really about minecraft and you need to leave this bit out because it doesn't really interest the reader.

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  3. Great start. Very clear. Does the reader want to know about playtime and lunch though? Perhaps this is not really about minecraft and you need to leave this bit out because it doesn't really interest the reader.

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  4. I really love it, the picture looks very pretty and your writing is nice too.

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  5. nice job jayden but next time use more adverbs

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  6. nice job jayden but next time use more adverbs

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